Rafael Zhong
ESL 100
3rd Draft
September 30, 2017
Born Again
Migrating to a new
country is one of the biggest challenges for any person. For those people who
had the experience to move to a new country, it is like a rebirth. When I was a
child, my parents had a plan to move to the U.S. to live a dream, where
everything is possible. After spending my whole childhood and adolescence in my
hometown Brazil, it was time. When
all the paperwork and the documents were ready for a new life. At the beginning,
everything was exciting and unique for me. The first month I did not realize
how much I had left behind moving to another country. After a while, I had a
strong agonizing feeling inside and I could not do much to change it. The hard
and lonely times were just about to start, and I realized having fun and
enjoying myself had never been so difficult since I came to the U.S.
In fact, soccer means
almost everything when referring to someone from Brazil. Once a week my friends
and I used to meet to play together, and it was so wonderful. This is the sport
when anger and love are involved at the same time in a match. Different than
Brazil, in the U.S. I cannot have the same emotion while I'm playing. There are
some factors that make the game not enjoyable like how it used to be in Brazil.
First, most of the time I do not know the players on the field. Second, the
players take every match too seriously. Some of them think we are disputing a
championship. Third, I am not able to play on my friend’s team anymore. Also, it
was very common my friends and I celebrate our friendship after every game with
beer and barbecue. Now, there is not more the part of a Brazilian soccer culture
and soul that I had back in the days. A friendly soccer game day with a
delicious barbecue followed by a cold beer.
In additional, partying
is significantly important in a student’s life just like getting high grades.
Different from the night life-style in The U.S, in my hometown it's more open
to the teenagers. The legal age to be able to have the access to the night clubs,
bars and purchase any kind of alcohol liquor needs to be18 years old. Going to
the bar was one of my favorite hobbies before I came to Chicago. The ability to
meet new people, laugh, relax and have fun at these places on the weekends does
not exist anymore. Nowadays, it's not part of my hobby, and was not my decision.
Hopefully, after my twenty-first birthday I will have the pleasure to join and learn
about the night life-style in the U.S.
In conclusion, spending
time having a conversation with friends about anything is just fascinating. The
feeling of truth and support of a real friendship is priceless. When I was in
Brazil, I had many friends from my childhood. Basically we grew up together, and
went to elementary and high school as well. This connection between us is
inexplicable with words. Not just friends but brothers from different mothers as we used to say in my native
language, Portuguese. In addition, we are not longer able to sit down in a
circle and just share our thoughts. The time and my beliefs changed after I got
into an airplane and came to North America. Adapting myself to a new culture
and learning a different language was a challenge for me. Making friends is not
one of my best skills and the fact, most of the students in the U.S. have their
own group of friends.
The positive and
negative sides about immigrating to other country are uncountable. In fact, losing
and learning will always be the foremost in an immigrant’s life. In my own
experience, because of the the circumstances, I am not apt to get back what I
lost. On the other hand, I have learned many important life lessons since I
move to Chicago. One of them is to enjoy spending time with myself. It has
became essential in my life. Many people ask me questions about my past and I
really miss those times, but living in the past is for a museum. Now, it is
time to live in the present and because of certain decisions I am grateful to
live in the dream country. Learning
to overcome the loss in translation of my country and culture has not been easy,
but these obstacles have made me a stronger person.
I agree with u, Americans take the sport game seriously, and they really care about win and lost. Back to ur essay, I don't think using "in conclusion" in fourth para is appropriate. This transition word is more fit to an ending but not body para. glad you have a nice ending.
ReplyDeleteYes, right. Thank you for show me this mistake, next essay I will not make the same mistake.
DeleteIn Your first body paragraph, we have similarities. I also used to play soccer once a weak with my friend, which I really miss. hopefully we can play soccer together.
ReplyDeleteYour second paragraph story similar to mine. In my country we had the same night life for teenagers is was more open then here in Chicago but it is ok you have only one year to wait till go somewhere here))))
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